Garden In Progress

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                time tracing down a dirty cheek

    dripping from a scraped chin

                           puddles of decay following battle

                                                   stubbornly growing cribbled roses

                                                                          wounded by hyena behavior

                                                                                              licking their own salt crusted petals

                                                                and the gardener is smiling

                                                    as she walks away


6 thoughts on “Garden In Progress

    realityenchanted said:
    December 28, 2012 at 11:23 pm

    Nice. Flowed well for me, except the part of licking salt crusted petals which I didn’t quite understand.


      realityinprogress responded:
      December 28, 2012 at 11:50 pm

      Thank you. The roses have grown from tears, hence the salt – maybe it should have been ‘wounded roses’ instead of ‘cribbled’… I didn’t think it through too much, just kinda let it form.


        realityenchanted said:
        December 29, 2012 at 12:03 am

        Ha! Now with this apt explanation, I daresay this was a beautiful poem. Flows perfectly. Simple words and descriptions that take one’s mind as close to the raw experience as one could get without being the actual gardener and roses.


          realityinprogress responded:
          December 29, 2012 at 12:10 am

          :) I’m glad it made a little more sense now. And thank you so much for caring enough to ask, that’s very valuable to me.


    realityenchanted said:
    December 29, 2012 at 12:15 am

    It made a lot more sense.
    You are warmly welcome. I try not to deceive myself or the writer.


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